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Sat, 16th Jan 2010 | restlesssolutions | Created on: originalshorts.com | 4,535 Views, 3 Nods.

dont take it to seriously

saw a poem on here an this is one i wrote years ago an thought as my head was empty of humour i would depress you all. if you want any more let me know. this is the most depressing by the way, the others are lovey dovey.

STUCK IN A LIFE.

stuck in a life you do not want to be in,
stuck with a sole that can never be forgiven,
forsaken to a world of grief an mayhem,
may i fall asleep an never awaken,

for the prospect of another day is daunting,
im just haunted by this feeling,
i may look happy but im just decieving,
so you better be beleiving.

my head is in peices but my mouth tells a differant story,
it lulls you into a false sence of security,
that i will be alive the next time you see me,
im sorry this is not how it was ment to be,
but the solitude of death is a new lease of life for me.

dont greave that death graced me early,
be happy that im in a place of fantasy,
an not on these planes of tragedy.

the life i left behind is now only a distant memory,
but the love i kept will always be a freind to me,
IM FINALLY FREE...


hoped i did not muck your night up. lol

                


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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
hey i think its great, sometimes the things that make you suffer are only hidden behind closed doors, this is what you wanted to express at the time and it is what it is - emotions arnt something to compete over - there are no losers
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
cheers guys, glad you like. bigc yeh i did misunderstand but glad it gives you a diferant perception on the matter. mamap, i also have two beautiful children now an life does go on from all testing times.
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
I went through that same experience in 1965. I still wonder how life would have been different. Luckily I had a beautiful child already,then life goes on and I had another beautiful child. Can associate some of my feelings at the time with your poem. Well done restlesssolutions! Bloody hell thats a lot of sssssssss's
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
You might have misunderstood restless, I was referring to my comments about suicide on 'Selfishness' as your poem seems to be about that. I lost someone close to a suicide recently and regarded that as a selfish act. Your poem has kind of helped me see the other side. A bit! You're comment on 'Selfishness' was spot on.
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
bigc. lol, cheers mate nothin to do with my comment on selfishness. this poem came about because i lost a child when i was a teenager.
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
Reading this and linking with some comments I made on Indigo's post 'Selfishness' has left me a bit confused. Didn't muck my night up though. Good first post restless, hopefully not your last.
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Sat, 16th Jan 2010
I like it. Don't put yourself down.
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